写了一份essay，找工作用的，有人能帮忙看看吗？

aying0122

如题，多谢了～

分分等着！

bulaohu

why don't you just post it here?

aying0122

[ 本帖最后由 aying0122 于 2010-9-16 20:33 编辑 ]

aying0122

字体变得好难看

申请cpa intern的，在新加坡

要求是：a 250-500 word essay on why you should be offered an internship placement

aying0122

不想太多chingalish丢人

俺非常重视这次intern……

帮帮忙～

leoqy

看到essay 吓我一跳
进来一看 这不是cover letter么

aying0122

原帖由 leoqy 于 2010-9-16 15:07 发表
看到essay 吓我一跳
进来一看 这不是cover letter么

人家要求说明是essay的嘛～～～～～～～～·

leoqy

原帖由 aying0122 于 2010-9-16 15:08 发表


人家要求说明是essay的嘛～～～～～～～～·

你还别说 我朋友还真写过essay
上次一份工作的selection criteria 一共6点 他写了7000字

aying0122

原帖由 leoqy 于 2010-9-16 15:11 发表

你还别说 我朋友还真写过essay
上次一份工作的selection criteria 一共6点 他写了7000字

7000字，你朋友真牛啊…… 我这250的，还挤了半天才挤出来……

真是250了～

不要歪楼！英语牛人们帮帮忙啊！

分分持有中！

lycans

Not bad, but it's not persuasive. To apply a position, you need to domonstrate you are the best candidate for the job not the other way around. I guess you need to write more on yourself(i.e. characters, professional skills and etc. ).

aying0122

原帖由 lycans 于 2010-9-16 15:21 发表
Not bad, but it's not persuasive. To apply a position, you need to domonstrate you are the best candidate for the job not the other way around. I guess you need to write more on yourself(i.e. characte ...

yeah...

the problem is there is no specific criteria from CPA Aus. The individual positions have their own requirements but this essay is not for the employers but to the CPA Aus.

So it did take me quit a time to come out with the broad, general cover letter....

lycans

原帖由 aying0122 于 2010-9-16 15:24 发表


yeah...

the problem is there is no specific criteria from CPA Aus. The individual positions have their own requirements but this essay is not for the employers but to the CPA Aus.

So it did take  ...

In either case, you still need to focus more on selling yourself then showing you are eager to get the job. Do you see my point??

iami