My story @ storybird (Second story now)

JoeW

Here is my first story on storybird, please make a comment. I want to get as many views as I can.

http://storybird.com/books/lost-spaceship-from-space/

LOST SPACESHIP FROM SPACE!

by Joe

"Landing in 53 seconds" said the computer. Tim was landing in an unknown planet. He was terrified. He wish he was back at Mars in his cosy house watching TV.

"It's time to explore" Tim cried out excitedly. He seen movies of people exploring. He was always jealous. Now he finally got to explore. Tim jogged some paces when he met a dog. It snarled and chased him.

He had an idea. "I'll lose the dog. He ran to a forest and made the most complicated way he could go. He lost the dog about halfway. When he finally came to a clearing he saw a really big building. In fact you can call it a castle!

Tim knocked on the door and went in. He was almost expected to here a giant booming " Who goes to my castle". But he did not. He saw a scientist writing plans for a rocket.Tim asked if he could try it politely and he said yes.

Tim knocked on the door and went in. He was almost expected to here a giant booming " Who goes to my castle". But he did not. He saw a scientist writing plans for a rocket.Tim asked if he could try it politely and he said yes.

[ 本帖最后由 JoeW 于 2010-12-9 21:37 编辑 ]

JoeW

Second story - A Poem

http://storybird.com/books/if-it-was-christmas/

If it was Christmas...

By Joe


If it was Christmas, would I be a kite flying through the air?
Or would I be a tree with very weird hair,
Would I be a toy, with an eye of the colour 'Sky Blue'?
Or would I be a flower afraid of swine flu
Would I be a person always down the drain?
Or would I be a person who whacks with very big canes
Would I be a man made of ice?
Or would I be some kind of superhero mice
Would I be a vacuum cleaner which makes noises funny?
Or would I be an ice-cream loved by mummies
But if I could choose what I want to be
I would be a
                          CHRISTMAS TREE !!!

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楼主是小朋友吗？还是家长？

JoeW

家长帮忙贴上来的，文章和内容都是自己写的。现在是year 4.

大家鼓励鼓励吧。

ylcg

原帖由 JoeW 于 2010-12-7 17:02 发表
家长帮忙贴上来的，文章和内容都是自己写的。现在是year 4.

大家鼓励鼓励吧。

小朋友会中文？能读能写？

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小朋友的写作热情值得赞扬。尤其是在老师没有要求写的情况下，愿意写，就很不错。

那首诗，想象力丰富，充满童趣

旋木

原来是楼主是小朋友啊，加分鼓励！
中文是在哪里学的？

念念

崇拜中。。。

JoeW

I can't read Chinese but my dad translated it to me. THANK YOU for your comment. I love you.

JoeW

George saves the day !!!
by Joe

A huge dragon flew into a village. Can George stop it or watch his village burn into flames?

Read the story here:

http://storybird.com/books/george-saves-the-day/

flora222

继续努力啊！