简历大公开，大家帮忙看看出什么问题了？

quiteold

master毕业整整1个月了，投了10多份简历，除了自动回复一个消息都没有，是不是简历或者cover letter有啥致命问题。

初来乍到，对澳洲的就业环境不了解，求指点，欢迎大家积极发言，不胜感激！

先看cover letter ...

Dear Sir/Madam,

I wish to apply for the position of XXX as advertised on SEEK on dd/mm/yyyy.

I have recently completed my Master of Information Technology degree at University of XXX. Over the past two years, I have achieved number of High Distinctions and Distinctions in my core subjects including Database, .NET Application Development, .NET Enterprise Development, Research Project, Cloud Computing and Software as a Service, Business Process Design, Unix System Programming etc.

During the same peiord, I have worked as an IT Support & Software Developer (part time) for a national-wide xxx chain company since June 2012. Apart from providing excellent IT support for the company’s head office in Sydney CBD and xx branches across Sydney and Brisbane, I also developed a wonderful and reliable back-office application to import variety of day-to-day business operational data (in Microsoft Excel format) from 14 branches into a central database (MS SQL Server) in the head office. Based on imported data, the application also generates payslips for accounting team on a fortnight basis and a wide range of business reports (vis SSRS) for senior management team, branch managers and other users.

In fact, before I came to Australia in November 2011, I had worked in China for years and mainly focused on database design and development including coding in T-SQL and PL/SQL, SSIS/DTS package development, report developement (SSRS), SQL performance tuning, etc.

For more detailed information, please find my attached resume. I would appreciate the opportunity of a further possible discussion or interview. I can be contacted via my mobile phone xxx xxx xxx or email address xxx.


Yours faithfully
XXX


再看简历：

XXX XXX
Mobile: xxxx xxx xxx
Email: xxx
LinkedIn: xxx

Summary
* Having great enthusiasm for developing data-centric applications to help businesses run more efficiently and more effectively, and solve their real business problems.

* Highly experienced in both BI/DW and OLTP systems development with Microsoft technologies and approaches.

* The ability to learn business knowledge quickly.

* A dependable and flexible team player, loving to share knowledge with peers.

* Holding a long-term work visa which allows me work in full-time roles in Australia.

Key Technical Skills
* DBMS: Microsoft SQL Server, Oracle Database.

* SQL Dialects: T-SQL, PL/SQL.

* Data Modelling: highly normalised data modelling, dimensional data modelling (the Star/Snowflake Schema).

* Approaches & Methodologies: Kimball's Approach and Methodology, Layered/Tiered Application Development, Agile Application Development, etc.

* Framework, Patterns & Programming Languages: .NET Framework, C#, ADO.NET, Entity Framework, WinForms, WPF, MVVM, ASP.NET, WebForms, MVC, JavaScript, HTML, etc.

* Others: Excel, etc.

Work Experience

06/2012 – 07/2014 | XXX | Sydney CBD
Title: IT Support & Software Developer (Part Time)
Responsibilities:
* Provided excellent IT support for the head office and xx branches in Sydney and xxx.

* Developed and maintained wonderful and reliable software to import variety of day-to-day business operational data (in Microsoft Excel format) from xx branches into a central database (SQL Server) deployed in the head office, generate payslips for accounting team on a fortnight basis, and a wide range of business reports (via SSRS) for senior management team, branch managers and other users.

07/2010 – 10/2011 | XXX | Beijing
Title: Software Engineer
Responsibilities:
* Worked in a fantastic software development team maintaining number of closely related products deployed in more than 280 large xxx over the world.

* Mainly focused on the implementation of those products at database side where almost all business logic was implemented, including issue and risk investigation, bug fix, the implementation of change requests, performance tunning, code review, etc.

* Provided level 3 support to help customers solve system problems.

* Organised and conducted training programs for new team members.

* Provided assistance to other teams to solve database related issues.

12/2009 – 06/2010 | XXX | Beijing
Title: Senior Consultant (BI/DW)
Responsibilities:
* Worked on-site in a very large banking system project for a non-state-owned commercial bank in Beijing.

* Mainly focused on ETL implementation in one of core components of the system, which integrates data from number of banking systems to a back-end engine for its following process.

04/2008 – 12/2009 | XXX | Beijing
Title:  Consultant (BI/DW)
Responsibilities:
* Worked on-site with a large accounting team in their 3 financial ETL projects for one of the world's leading telecommunication solution provider in South China.

* Mainly focused on ETL design and implementation based on business requirements gained in massive discussion with clients.

* Transferred and shared business knowledge to other team members, particularly new team members.

* Deployed and maintained software version control system for 2 of 3 above projects.

* Also worked as a SQL Server technical support in a large government project to assist a third-party Java development team to migrate the underlying database platform from Oracle10g to SQL Server 2008.

04/2007 – 01/2008 | XXX | Beijing
Title: Senior Software Engineer (BI/DW)
Responsibilities:
* Worked in a large Microsoft's BI/DW project which was one of the top 10 largest BI/DW projects (in terms of data volume) in China in 2007.

* Mainly focused on ETL implementation and maintenance with DTS and SSIS, plus some exposures to cube maintenance (SSAS).

* Took much responsibility for introducing a well-designed metadata-based ETL tool (developed by Microsoft IT with SSIS) to later BI/DW projects.

Educational Qualifications

* Master of Information Technology (July 2014)
    Faculty of Engineering and Information Technology
    University of XXX, Australia

* Bachelor of Engineering in Computer and Application (July 1998)
    Department of Computer Science and Engineering
    XXX University, China

quiteold

大家帮我看看，简历投出去没有回应，潜意识里感觉肯定是哪里出问题了！

自己顶

kkyy2528

才一个月，才10几份，别太心急了。以前找工作的时候都是1天10几份的投，投了2，3个月才有机会面试。

luola

同意楼上的， 我投了快100份才找到的工作

echoxyz

You should mention how your skills can contribute to the company, what you can do for the position and the company, rather than blabla what you know how you grow up what you have done

青冥揽日

看内容：LZ的skills已经很不错了，英文writing也是很好的。相信你找到工作的概率非常大。

以下是我的建议：
Profile，最好有。
Achievements，一定要有，并且写的吸引人。
Experience的format可以改一下。
Cover letter 的内容不大符合AU Marketing strategy，可以换个方式。

kawara

楼主是98年大学毕业么？

青冥揽日

我也是在找工作，这些都是Skillmax课程上学到的，有几个同学都找到工作了。
我个人还是很认可skillmax，推荐！

quiteold

echoxyz 发表于 2014-8-21 17:32
You should mention how your skills can contribute to the company, what you can do for the position a ...

有道理，以前在国内写简历的老习惯，只说自己过去干的，看来得改了。

谢谢你的建议。

quiteold

青冥揽日 发表于 2014-8-21 17:40
看内容：LZ的skills已经很不错了，英文writing也是很好的。相信你找到工作的概率非常大。

以下是我的建议 ...

写作还好，口语就差了，雅思口语没上7。

谢谢鼓励，欢迎对其中不合适的英文描述提修改意见。

quiteold

luola 发表于 2014-8-21 17:30
同意楼上的， 我投了快100份才找到的工作

一起努力，如果是同行，多交流，欢迎linked in。

echoxyz

quiteold 发表于 2014-8-21 18:13
有道理，以前在国内写简历的老习惯，只说自己过去干的，看来得改了。

谢谢你的建议。 ...

and delete your working visa information
delete useless sentences in summary
everybody is hardworking diligent smart handsome cope well with colleges......................

quiteold

kkyy2528 发表于 2014-8-21 17:02
才一个月，才10几份，别太心急了。以前找工作的时候都是1天10几份的投，投了2，3个月才有机会面试。  ...

我只看BI/DW相关的，一天公布出来也就5，6个，落到用SQL Server技术的也就2，3个了。

欢迎交流面试经历，稍后我先贴我的一个。

fanjia1002

加油！！ job market不行 只有多投多面

quiteold

kawara 发表于 2014-8-21 17:41
楼主是98年大学毕业么？

是的，98年本科毕业，都快老糊涂了，：）

quiteold

青冥揽日 发表于 2014-8-21 17:41
我也是在找工作，这些都是Skillmax课程上学到的，有几个同学都找到工作了。
我个人还是很认可skillmax，推 ...

能问一下，我们是同行吗？如果是，欢迎交流技术问题，技不精不行呀。

nikyxin

我觉得需要浓缩

经验够了，可是有点太detail反而突出不了重点

可以根据广告适当突出关键词关键句，其他内容精简

quiteold

fanjia1002 发表于 2014-8-21 18:18
加油！！ job market不行 只有多投多面

对澳洲市场一窍不通呀，觉得投那么多简历了，一个消息都没有，就感觉自己cover letter或者简历有啥问题。

比如，我在cover letter里第二段写上学期间相关课程的成绩是否必要？是不人家一看刚毕业就不往下看了。

quiteold

nikyxin 发表于 2014-8-21 18:22
我觉得需要浓缩

经验够了，可是有点太detail反而突出不了重点

我个人感觉，技术人员的简历肯定要写detail，否则别人看不出你的经验在哪？

其实，我已经浓缩了，你看我简历中，都没有挨个列project介绍，而是浓缩写了一下。而且我觉得我那写工作经历应该是HR，中介和技术面试官都应该能看懂的。当然，必需仔细看，一眼确实看不出重点，是要改进一些了。

按广告进行调整倒是没错，我会注意的，多谢指教。

xiaowu11812

近2年工作都不容易找，楼主技术很不错，很快就会有机会的。

kawara

多给自己点时间。半年到一年吧

quiteold

xiaowu11812 发表于 2014-8-21 18:44
近2年工作都不容易找，楼主技术很不错，很快就会有机会的。

谢谢鼓励。

同行吗，同行多交流，愿意一起讨论各种SQL Server数据库方面的问题（不过对数据库管理方面不是很熟，即使这样，同样欢迎一起讨论此类问题，看这边DBA工作也不少，可惜自己没做过专业的DBA）。

xyliu925

summary and key skills may not needed as theses should be changed according to the job description.

xyliu925

summary and key skills may not needed as theses should be changed according to the job description.

quiteold

kawara 发表于 2014-8-21 18:48
多给自己点时间。半年到一年吧

半年等不起呀，毕业了，兼职都辞掉了，现在专职找工作，哪敢拖那么久。

反正尽力找吧，也希望大家推荐，本人英语写没有任何问题，在外企工作多年，每天写邮件和美国同事交流。口语虽然差点，但技术不会让大家推荐后丢人的。

求推荐。

kawara

quiteold 发表于 2014-8-21 18:55
半年等不起呀，毕业了，兼职都辞掉了，现在专职找工作，哪敢拖那么久。

反正尽力找吧，也希望大家推荐， ...

如果经济吃紧，别全职找工作

quiteold

kawara 发表于 2014-8-21 18:58
如果经济吃紧，别全职找工作

嗯，也是刚开始找工作，还未进入正轨。
感谢提醒！

kevin2005

你这个是应聘开发工作吧

个人觉得啊

1、技术细节太少，你应该比照招聘要求，把你干过的具体技术写出来：具体用到的开发工具、语言，实现的技术成果等等，多强调技术。

你这个看起来有点虚，像应聘manager似的。

而且cover lettter第一段写了那么多高大上的名词，.net开发、research、cloud、unix programming，再加上第一句又是你刚毕业，给人的感觉就是你实际啥也不会。实际这些东西有一个就绰绰有余了。比如你应聘的是.net岗位，就只强调.net，多写几个.net的名词，强调自己的经验就好了。

2、个人觉得，刚毕业这事别提了，没啥好处，在最后的教育经历里面提一下就好了。你明明有这么多经验，结果第一句话就是自己刚毕业，我想大部分人都没啥兴趣往下看了。

quiteold

kevin2005 发表于 2014-8-21 19:16
你这个是应聘开发工作吧

个人觉得啊

中肯，我也觉得提刚毕业不太对。但不提的话过去2年多为啥没有专职工作，为啥在悉尼兼职IT Support？躲总躲不过去，所以就如实写的。

不过你说的很对，我看看怎么个改法。非常感谢。

quiteold

echoxyz 发表于 2014-8-21 18:17
and delete your working visa information
delete useless sentences in summary
everybody is hardwork ...

谢谢，我以为公司招人会比较看重teamwork的，而且我确实很容易和同事相处，也很喜欢帮助别人，分享知识。

我想想这块怎么改，再次感谢。