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原帖由 Lovebigcat 于 2012-4-24 23:04 发表 
-------- No. We learn, but we cannot learn so much in several years. We didn't learn from the basic using real text books or by local teachers.And we don't have full time to study english, we have to ...
影响很多人英文表达的其实是思维习惯,中式思维习惯是感性而主观的,但西式思维习惯是理性而客观的(至少形式上要客观),所以只要把这个思维习惯转过来,不成问题,我下面就针对lovecat那段话做了评论修改:
Your grasp of grammar is reasonably good. To present a more forceful argument, try avoid using ‘we’ as much as possible. ‘We’ is used to state personal views, as in ‘we think…’, but not a good word for reasoning. Good reasoning is impersonal but convincing. See my suggestions as below:
“It is not realistic for one to master a completely foreign language in less than ten years, yet most of us Chinese migrants are expected to speak fluent English from Day One. Without being brought up in an English environment, most Chinese migrants have to take extra study to catch up with their Aussie counterparts in terms of basic communication skills. Most of them, however, cannot afford the luxury of extra English study, as their time schedules are fully packed with work and family commitments. ‘Will English study help me to pay my mortgage?’ is the sort of question haunting the mind of many Chinese migrants, who have not quite settled down in Australia yet. It does help - but only in the long run, when we are all dead. “
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