关于Volunteer的求职信

sarahbing

第一次申请当志愿者，不知道这么给他们发EMAIL是不是合适。。。希望英语高手能够多多指教。嘿嘿
21th August, 2009







To Whom It May Concern:

Re:dfdg@%^$.com.au

Advertised on %$^#$%#$%#.com.au



I would like to apply for a position as a community visitor in your organisation .





I am an enthusiastic girl who is not afraid of hard work or challenges, I am punctual, loyal, have lots of energy, work well within a team environment and am always courteous with the public and the people I wok with. Also, I learn quickly and am self motivated. I am 20 years old who like to chat with elder people because I like to listen the stories from grandparents, which can enrich my experience and broaden my horizons. At the same time, I can bring elder people the culture and stories of China for I am a Chinese girl.

Please give me a chance. I will try to do my best


Enclosed is my CV and I hope to get your answer.



Kind regards





Sarahbing

sarahbing

为什么没有人回复呢。。。。。(monkey37)

qikeyuan

Also i m a quick learner?

紫雨寒冰

正好学习下

sarahbing

啊喔，，，传说中的英语达人为什么不现身(monkey08) 。。。拜托英语达人了呀。。。我想当志愿者来着，不知道怎么写才显得更加真诚。

tower

原帖由 sarahbing 于 2009-8-23 20:23 发表
啊喔，，，传说中的英语达人为什么不现身(monkey08) 。。。拜托英语达人了呀。。。我想当志愿者来着，不知道怎么写才显得更加真诚。

英语达人是谁？哪个ID?

sarahbing

原帖由 tower 于 2009-8-23 20:29 发表

英语达人是谁？哪个ID?

泛指的哈。。。新足迹上好多英语达人的。。。嘿嘿

kingkongfei

建议LZ去图书馆借阅一下写cover letter的指导书。
个人建议：
1。太短，长度最好1页
2。cover letter不是你说你自己多好，而是从实际例子说明你多好。如：有5年的客户经验，能深刻了解客户的需求及处理客户危机问题
3。不要在cover letter里透露你的年龄和国籍，容易造成歧视

sarahbing

恩。谢谢LS啦(monkey26)

dolinloop

同意第二第三点，至于第一点篇幅是短了些，但也没有必要长到一页。现在结构上主要的问题是主要内容都在一段，结构不清晰。需要合理分段，突出重点。

sarahbing

恩。。谢谢指教(monkey26)

zetex

Cover letters are concidered very important, but it needs to be concise short simple, easy for the selection officer to see your qualities. Instead of in One FULL paragraph, spread things out. and group the relevant qualities and talents together.

Also attach this letter as a word document in the email. Some people don't read emails, they just read what's attached.

中文不是很好，写英文有时候比较快~ 见谅

kingkongfei

原帖由 dolinloop 于 2009-8-23 21:41 发表
同意第二第三点，至于第一点篇幅是短了些，但也没有必要长到一页。现在结构上主要的问题是主要内容都在一段，结构不清晰。需要合理分段，突出重点。

其实加了Letter heading，上方那些自己和对方的地址联系方式，加最后签名，当中真正能写得没有几个字，但感觉1段还是太少了。
同意LS的，语句要精炼。

zetex

Try this... you may need to add a few more things to "beef it up"...

21th August, 2009

HR Manager
[Company Name]
[FULL Address if possible]



To Whom It May Concern:

I am writing to you to apply for the position of Community Visitor Advertised on %$^#$%#$%#.com.au.

I believe that I am the perfect candidate for this position, I am punctual and efficient, work well within a team environment as well as a individual and I am always courteous with the public and the people in which I work with.

I am an enthusiastic and engertic girl who loves challenges and I am a fast learner and very self motivated. I am great with the elderly people, I enjoy listening to the stories from them, in which I believe can enrich my experience and broaden my horizons.

[If possible put some past experience in here so they can see what you have done that's relevant to this... the trick is to put ANYTHING that's remotely relevant. They want to see someone with BROAD range of experience, especially with relevance to what they do]

Please feel free to browse through my attached Resume and I am free anytime to sit down with you and discuss my pospects further. Thank you for your time.


Kind regards

Sarah Bing