郁闷，找工一个月没接到一个电话，简历求批。。。

dolic

一个月投简历少说也有50+份，每个都会有针对性地写写coverletter，有些感觉很合适的还打过cold call，结果雇主中介电话都没接到过，连个interview的机会都没有啊，是不是简历和coverletter有大问题啊，我贴出来大家打击我一下吧。。。
P.S我是机械工程师，电子产品方向，国内工作8年

[ 本帖最后由 dolic 于 2012-5-23 22:42 编辑 ]

dolic

resume & coverletter~~~~~~

dolic

cover letter:
Dear XXX,
With regard to your current advertisement for a Senior Design Engineer, I am confident you will be interested in my relevant accomplishments and experience detailed in the enclosed résumé.
You will note that my qualifications closely match your requirements:                                       
You Require
•Be proficient with CAD, Solidworks, or Pro-E       
I Offer
•I’ve got over 5 years’ hands-on experience in using SOLIDWORKS, including of 3D Solid Modeling and advanced 3D surface design, and provided training and guidance for junior engineers.
You Require
•Plastic experience, tooling experience          
I Offer
•8 years of experience in electronics product research and development, and acquaint with all kinds of mechanical design characteristic especially in plastic parts, injection molding, sheet metal stamping, secondary process technology and related machining process. with a majority experience in automotive electronics and home appliances，including automobile phone, DVD-GPS system, soymilk maker, rice cooker, humidifier, meal cooker and so on. I’m responsible for the entire product development phase, from concept design to production. Over the past 8 years, I have provided innovative and robust mechanical design solutions for variety customers according to the specified market requirements.
You Require
•Must be Degree Qualified with mechanical design experience       
I Offer
•I’ve got bachelor’s degree in Mechanical Engineering and Automation, which was assessed as equivalent to Australian Bachelors Degree by the Institute of Engineers Australia and Overseas.
       
I would appreciate the opportunity to discuss your current needs and what I have to offer. With proven innovative design skills and a superior performance record, I could step into the position and be of immediate assistance.
Thank you.
Sincerely,
XXX

上书房行走

u need to show ppl u used english before to prove ur ability to work.

上书房行走

机电一体化的吗 跟我专业一样也.

如果你只想申请senior position，更要强调你对澳洲标准的熟悉和英文的熟练应用. 不光是写还有说.

而且你找工才一个月，要做好"半年找不到"的心理准备

[ 本帖最后由 上书房行走 于 2012-5-23 16:39 编辑 ]

dolic

简历也贴一下吧。。。。
Mobile: XXX                                                                                        XXX
Email: XXX                                                                                        XXX VIC
Visa: XXX
Profile
Highly analytical and broadly skilled Mechanical Design Engineer with 7+ year’s experience in developing efficient, cost competitive, reliable and innovative designs.; Extensive knowledge in Engineering Industries including Automotive, Energy, Industrial products and Consumer Appliances; Proven ability to apply general principles of physics and engineering to provide technically feasible solutions for complex engineering problems; A good command of product quality process and related documents such as DFEMA, CP, 8D report, SPC, MSA and so an. Accredited engineering qualification of Professional Mechanical Engineer by the Institution of Engineers, Australia.
Career Summary
Feb 20xx – April 20xx                        XXX COMPANY –
                                        Senior Mechanical Design Engineer
Jun 20xx – Jan 20xx                        XXX COMPANY –
                                        Mechanical Design Engineer
Skills
•        Mechanical Design Engineering        •        3D/2D CAD and Design Tools
•        Finite Element Analysis        •        Project Management
•        Design for Assembly        •        Prototyping & Testing
•        Cost Analysis        •        Drawing Standards Compliance
•        Pro/E wildfire 3.0/4.0/5.0        •        SolidWorks
•        Computational Analysis        •        Test Procedures
•        Production Engineering        •        Value Engineering
Professional Experience
Feb 20xx – April 20xx                        XXX COMPANY
                                        Senior Mechanical Design Engineer
I reported to the Engineering Manager, collaborated with product developers and engineers to provide integrate product design solutions and deliver complete system/sub-system level designs to multinational companies, including A， B， C， AND D.
Key responsibilities:
•        Designed and specified mechanical parts, created innovative and robust mechanical designs according to the specified market requirements.
•        Analyzed performance specification and functional requirements to create plans.
•        Researched existing technologies and patents based on target industries.
•        Evaluated mechanical and thermal properties of product under extreme operational environments.
•        Designed of experiment for product, identified root cause and come up solution.
•        Draft 3D/2D engineered drawings for products; manage bill of materials generation.
•        Calculated costs incurred with material and manufacture.
•        Developed testing specifications and perform calculations & FEA analysis to evaluate design integrity.
•        Maintained comprehensive documentation of complex design activities.
•        Communicated with suppliers and overseas engineers to improve efficiency, reduce cost and ensure project schedule.
Key achievements:
•        Innovative product development: Conceptualized, designed and prototyped 4 innovative household appliances, including A， B， C， AND D; patents pending on new technologies and processes.
•        Productivity Improvement: Redesigned a XXX system, initiate led to a 30% productivity by implementing efficient development processes- ultrasonic welding, and innovative design options- detachable design with PCB press-fit mounting.
•        Value engineering: Optimized XXX System by reconfiguring layout of valves, piping and control components, and substituted casting process with stamping process, resulting in substantial improvements of the material cost and 20% of the previous assembly time.
•        Project management: Built a communication checklist for cross-functional team to tackle complex technical problems to improve efficiency.
•        Supervision and teamwork: Prepared all the training material and documentation- Trained junior engineers, technicians and staff in the engineering drawings and principles.
Jun 20xx – Jan 20xx                                XXX COMPANY
                                                Mechanical Design Engineer
I reported to the design manager with responsibility for designing and specifying mechanical parts for diverse automotive products. Utilize UNIGRAPHICS in the development of new designs and components.
Key responsibilities:
•        Developed mechanical systems and components.
•        Compared and chose appropriate metal and plastic materials for various requirements.
•        Reviewed feasibility of product design, identified potential issues, and implemented changes that improve vehicle form and function.
•        Liaised with external suppliers to specify components correctly and gain appropriate samples and prototypes.
•        Defined geometry and dimension and tolerance for 3D and 2D drawing; to ensure product’s flexibility and manufacturability.
•        Put forward specific painting or plating specification after sufficient discussion.
•        Made mockup with rapid prototyping technique, and evaluate design proposals.
•        Qualified mechanical parts and maintain mechanical parts database.
•        Cost reduction action for projects and support mechanical parts purchasing.
Key achievements:
•        Product development: Designed and created 3D/2D drawings, for automotive sub systems, such as A， B， C， D， AND E – products were highly valued in the XXX Exhibition.
•        Project Management: Simultaneously conducted 3 projects and successfully implemented model changes for new launching XXX products.
•        CAD software: Developed a solid understanding of UNIGRAPHICS and Pro/E Wildfire after comprehensive training and utilizing in the development of new designs and components.
Education
20XX~~-20XX Bachelor, Mechanical Engineering and Automation
XXX UNIVERSITY
Assessed as equivalent to Australian Bachelors Degree by the Institute of Engineers Australia and Overseas Qualification Unit.
Referees
Please note that referees are available upon request

zuzururu007

请问一下这个visa是指visa number吗？

dolic

原帖由 上书房行走 于 2012-5-23 16:28 发表
u need to show ppl u used english before to prove ur ability to work.

PPL short for?
英语能力没体现出来的确是个问题啊，2L兄弟厉害，但是改如何体现呢？。。。我之前公司基本上是做海外客户项目老板也是老外，这点需要写出来放简历里或者coverletter里？

zuzururu007

帮你顶顶，

dolic

原帖由 zuzururu007 于 2012-5-23 22:54 发表
请问一下这个visa是指visa number吗？

不是是visa type...

kaien123456

握个手，12年的设备服务工程师飘过。

不过，我现在是高低通吃，既找SENIOR的，低端的也来者不拒

上书房行走

PPL short for people.

my opinion :   you need to prove your linguistic skills via any projects happened in english speaking companies or teams.

show agent or employer the scope of team / project . what kinda people in team.

interview is very important start. People need to see your face. so my opinion is to cut short ur cover letter, show u can communicate in english. just ask for a chance of interview.

dolic

原帖由 kaien123456 于 2012-5-24 10:01 发表
握个手，12年的设备服务工程师飘过。

不过，我现在是高低通吃，既找SENIOR的，低端的也来者不拒

你牛， draftsman之类的也投过，同样没人理，基本都是要求mining,building service行业经验，我倒是也想改行，不知道这边雇主对行业背景要求多严格。。。

dolic

原帖由 上书房行走 于 2012-5-24 10:53 发表
PPL short for people.

my opinion :   you need to prove your linguistic skills via any projects happened in english speaking companies or teams.

show agent or employer the scope of team / project . ...

Thanks buddy， but how to make it? Do you mean a cold call? I actually tried but still not effective so far. Any suggestion?

上书房行走

modify your CV to show the project details.  clients. etc.

any australian clients? list them all on CV

tvc889

The cover letter needs a better job. You don't have to say you can offer them what they want by quoting their selection criteria.

Focus on your experience & achievements in the past.

原帖由 dolic 于 2012-5-23 12:36 发表
cover letter:
Dear XXX,
With regard to your current advertisement for a Senior Design Engineer, I am confident you will be interested in my relevant accomplishments and experience detailed in the enc ...

tvc889

Change the format. Move all your achievements to the top after your contact information. Your past responsibilities mean little if nothing to your potential employers.

Good luck. Try to buy newspaper as well. My wife got her first job by applying for a General Manager position from a newspaper ad.

原帖由 dolic 于 2012-5-23 22:50 发表
简历也贴一下吧。。。。
Mobile: XXX                                                                                        XXX
Email: XXX                                                                                        XXX VIC
Visa: XXX
Profile
Highly analytical and broadly skilled Mechanical Design Engineer with 7+ year’s experience in developin ...

上书房行走

General Manager

下跪了

dolic

原帖由 tvc889 于 2012-5-24 12:47 发表
Change the format. Move all your achievements to the top after your contact information. Your past responsibilities mean little if nothing to your potential employers.

Good luck. Try to buy newspaper ...

Thx, good suggestion, your wife is awesome... what's newspaper exactly? I only have "leader" in my hand

kaien123456

原帖由 dolic 于 2012-5-24 10:54 发表


你牛， draftsman之类的也投过，同样没人理，基本都是要求mining,building service行业经验，我倒是也想改行，不知道这边雇主对行业背景要求多严格。。。

很严格。当然，我认为这基本是扯淡。
我最有兴趣的行业是医疗器械，可惜进不去啊。

maggiezhu99

可以下载一些COVER LETTER format， 个人感觉你的cover letter写得太僵硬了，you require, I offer.即使翻成中文看了也不舒服。---- 不是打击你，真的的想帮你找到问题。
另外COVER LETTER 不易太长，只要针对雇主的的广告有针对的回答就行了,不需要重复广告内容，言辞恳切一切，但是技术要表现自信一些。最好把曾经有过的客户，最好是把有名的客户在COVER LETTER 提一下。 ---- 实在不行有专门的agent可以帮忙改简历的。
另外如果可以，提供一点曾经的设计一起发过去 ---- 不过切记一定要保护好前雇主的隐私，澳洲人很看重这点，以免弄巧成拙。

Good Luck!

911110000

不用交代visa type吧

dolic

原帖由 maggiezhu99 于 2012-5-24 19:08 发表
可以下载一些COVER LETTER format， 个人感觉你的cover letter写得太僵硬了，you require, I offer.即使翻成中文看了也不舒服。---- 不是打击你，真的的想帮你找到问题。
另外COVER LETTER 不易太长，只要针对雇主的的广告有 ...

谢谢！cover letter长度多少合适呢，我下的sample都写了不少。。。。

dolic

原帖由 911110000 于 2012-5-24 20:19 发表
不用交代visa type吧

因为没有澳洲本地经验啊，又有不少招聘信息上写明至少pr，就加上了

ringsun

个人意见：
cover letter如楼上几位所说，太过僵硬。你对照要求逐条写出你自己的能力，简短，然后简述自己工作背景及个人技能支持上述能力，再希望能够给予面试机会，要简洁。就可以了。
Resume也蛮长的，referee直接写上联系人姓名 职位 电话。

两个写的都不专业，找人帮改改吧。

另外现在澳洲经济的确不景气，哪里都很quiet，要耐心等待。

XIE

I never told any staff you did wrong! You should not do it, you...you...you are like super big boss point you finger to others, you! Do this,  you! Do that.....   especially in the cover letter.  Always I , I, I, . .. Or my colleague recommended me , or my clients recommended me...
in the cover letter , 'you' means you are challenging the person who are reading your cover letter. You are applying a job, not telling a junior staff how to read a cover letter properly.

kaien123456

LZ啊，你的简历还算将就，但这个COVER LETTER绝对0分啊。
我要是RECRUITER，看一眼就扔。网上搜一搜，重新写一个模板吧。

000567

把你的 I offer 总结成一段话，来介绍你自己，着重强调和工作match的东西。个人看法，不过我觉得这和没电话联系不大，问题是没有local exp

dolic

羞愧羞愧……
明天去图书馆学习一下……然后改改coverletter再请大家继续批。。。

XIE

four to maximum five paragraphs.... First one, why do you apply the job, where do you found this job, on the seek, or Courier Mails , or gold coast bulletin ads.
second and third why do you think you are the best candidate for this job....sell yourself, not argue with people, not you, you, you, remember I I I I , I have this experience to touch doggie's bum or teeties , I have achieved twin boys with my wife by only one shot!  Try to sell yourself with the key word appeared in the ads...
2 &3 is to attract hr people to read your cv.. It's like a girl showing her little cleavage, not naked boobies, you are doing the same,  
not copy your cv... Otherwise, you do not need to provide ur cv.