人生”第一桶金“

dondon

发错地方了，应该发到中学教育。

孩子参加一个写作比赛，拿了一等奖，$50.
写作共分为4各小组： free style（1000字） 诗歌，漫画，prompt 就是给一个句子起头，开始写（500字）。
我家孩子参加的是free style， 2个获奖一等奖的，她是其中一个。

小朋友很激动，这是人生第一次因为自己的劳动所得。平时妈妈会给pocket money，但是感觉很不一样。

贴一小段孩子的作品：


I was drowning.

Falling and falling into the eternal void below me, great depths of coldness and emptiness. It called out to me, it sung out to me and I embraced its smooth, sweet tone. I momentarily stopped fighting but I couldn't stop the urges to let myself fall. But I knew I couldn't fall again. Around me， was filled with a strange sense of solidarity and ataraxia, touching lightly at my lips was a cold plate, and on it, I tasted a strange yet light saccharine gloss. The texture was so light and wispy, it was an inexplicable mix between felt and spider webs. It pressed against my lips, I could feel it urging me to take a sip, a final sip. I didn't. Suddenly, I felt a sharp wave of iciness and wetness strike me, pushing me under. Trying to stifle me in an invisible cage where I would fall to my death, but I would not let that happen. I kept fighting and fighting until I realised that this was brutality that was acting upon me, I saw the faint outline of a face, silently cackling.

dondon

发错地方了，不知道如何改到中学教育里去。

littlemoon1981

kangarooo

A lot of detailed descriptions! Show no tell, great! 孩子读几年级啊？

dondon

kangarooo 发表于 2021-9-16 21:36
A lot of detailed descriptions! Show no tell, great! 孩子读几年级啊？

8年级了，中学生。今年年初开始，写东西突然突飞猛进，自己都说比去年好了10倍。

白雲山民

X10000000

adige

祝贺

Hillwang

恭喜恭喜

缓缓

有前途

商务车

太牛了

月亮

写的真好，有JK Rowling的范儿。

oao

祝贺

whatalife

孩子很棒，恭喜。